Displaced families in the Gaza Strip spent a sleepless night as heavy rain flooded their fragile tents, soaking mattresses and belongings and turning camp pathways into pools of muddy water. The rain marks the start of another difficult winter for hundreds of thousands of Palestinians who have been displaced by the war and are living in tents or makeshift shelters with little protection. The UN Office for the Coordination of Humanitarian Affairs said in an October report that an estimated 950,000 displaced Palestinians were living in sites at medium to high risk of flooding, including more than 400,000 in areas considered at high risk.
Some 294,250 families need shelter assistance for the rainy season, but available supplies were sufficient to provide partial assistance to only 18% of those in need. (Source: AP)
Left out here: Leaves out what changes the picture
The article says shelter supplies cover only 18% of families in need but never says why. The same day's coverage reports that Israel was blamed for not allowing shelters and construction materials into Gaza, and that Israel had destroyed vehicles used to pump water. Without this, a reader takes the shortfall as a matter of logistics or bad luck, not a restriction imposed by a named party.
Press TV reports a night of flooding in Gaza's displacement camps and gives UN figures on flood risk and shelter shortfalls. It says Palestinians were displaced "by the war" and never names Israel, though the same day's coverage says Israel's war displaced most of Gaza's residents. It also gives no reason for the shortfall in shelter supplies, a smaller gap.
Hides who did it
Serious
“who have been displaced by the war”
Why this matters
The words "displaced by the war" make an abstract war the cause of the displacement and leave out who displaced these people.
The impression it gives
A reader believes hundreds of thousands of Palestinians ended up in tents through a war with no named actor, like a natural disaster.
The context
The same day's coverage names Israel: it describes Israel's assault on the territory and says Israel's war had displaced most of Gaza's more than 2 million residents and destroyed vehicles used to pump water. The article never names Israel at all.
The rain marks the start of another difficult winter for hundreds of thousands of Palestinians displaced by Israel's assault on Gaza, who are living in tents or makeshift shelters with little protection.
Leaves out what changes the picture
Minor
What is missing
The article says shelter supplies cover only 18% of families in need but never says why. The same day's coverage reports that Israel was blamed for not allowing shelters and construction materials into Gaza, and that Israel had destroyed vehicles used to pump water. Without this, a reader takes the shortfall as a matter of logistics or bad luck, not a restriction imposed by a named party.